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Not My Car

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This isn't my
car accident,
you know.

Bent fenders,
shattered window,
dented bumpers,
weeping willow… 

It’s A-Okay-
it’s not my car!

The company
owns the tie bar,
not me.

Broken femur,
open wound,
shaken dreamer,
bleeding noses… 

It’s A-Okay-
these aren't my kids!

The school system
raises eyelids,
not me.

Aimless driving,
reckless boldness,
lifeless corpses,
fading conscious…

It’s A-Okay-
it’s not my life!

Everything’s done
by my tight-knit
community.

Nothing is my
responsibility
where there’s seven
billion just like me…

A few might care
about the words in me,
but I’m a cell
to the social body. 

If all is one,
we’re all at fault;
this car-wreck life
grinds to a halt.

Original idea: A poem about irresponsibility.
Result: A poem about irresponsibility, but with plenty of subtext to dissect and discuss.
Final Thoughts: Human Nature? Sociopolitical? Horror? Narrative? I'm sticking this one in General Poetry...

The second poem in the deviously-acclaimed "Loud Enough" collection.
Previous: Diamond GirlI’m looking for a
shining star-
one all will perceive
from afar 
Not without blemish,
but on par-
just seeming perfect
from afar
Oh, diamond girl
lost in the darkness-
prove to the world
your fabled toughness!
I’m looking for a
role model-
of resilience
to idol
Not without a scar,
yet vital-
with intelligence
to idol 
Oh, diamond girl
drowning in our hate-
prove to the world
we determine fate!
I’m looking for a
miracle-
an excitement to
chronicle
We’re frozen like a
Popsicle-
static values I
chronicle
Oh, diamond girl
with knowledge of love-
prove to the world
how to rise above!

Next: ThinkerHe once was told
“Don’t be naïve!”
and ever since
he did conceive
that based on what
he could perceive
there’s nothing for
him to believe,
so the thinker thought
of what he had
to know.
He once was told
“Don’t be so weird!”
and ever since
he always feared
dying alone
because he neared
the foreign path
from which he veered,
so the thinker thought
of how he had
to grow.
He once was told
“Don’t be content!”
and ever since
he became bent
on proving truth
as different
from all the lies
that we invent,
so the thinker thought
of what he had
to show. 
With heart bleeding
and unbelieving,
he was buying
common thinking-
never stopping,
never asking
about meaning
for his living,
so the thinker thought
and thought
and thought
and thought
to the death.
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FallenAvalon's avatar
Nice. You make the argument a lot better than people who are paid to do so. Keep it up.