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He said she said
"that's what you said!"
This is flying
over my head
This is quoting
statements undead
This is writing
with bone-dry lead
He knew she knew
"nothing is new"
Another sip
of aging brew
Another trip
with same old view
Another hip
broken in two
He thought she thought
"all is for naught"
One more season
"forever" sought
One more reason
"forever" taught
One more treason
"forever" fought
Forever in
quotation marks
Broken records
setting off sparks
Missing context
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If You're Going to Write a Poem
If you're going to write a poem,
stop hiding behind words like mine and personal.
Give it to the world, open ended-
tell them, "I made this for you,"
because you did, even if
you won't admit it.
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A battle cry for the lost.
Open your eyes my child,
we're on the way home.
We may not win the battle,
but you wont go down alone.
Your mother wont be forgotten,
she was taken way too soon...
But,revenge is never the answer,
a calm mind will help us bloom
We ran away from death,
and feel guilty from the fright!
But we will return for our family!
We'd rather die with a fight!
Come to arms my brothers!
Nomads, we are not.
Think about our precious lands,
or maybe you all forgot...
Well, whoever will stand with me,
clear the anger from your heart.
Blindness from rage is fatal ,
and we'd be doomed from the start.
So open your eyes my people!
We are on the way home.
We m
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Trees
Waxy leaves shine,
Like the jewels of a fool’s paradise.
Shadows dance amongst their high hopes.
Ready to crash and burn,
Amidst the fire of fall.
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A poem about quotation, and more prominently, original ideas.
One of three poems about argumentation. Check out the others -
One of three poems about argumentation. Check out the others -
LogosAn adventure in reasoning
Suspend your disbelief
and open up your mind -
only tension relief
lets you grasp what you find.
Why?
Deep into a given
discussion of logic,
we may as well have been
looking into magic.
Why?
What could we ever prove
when empirical truths
are concepts to remove
from assumptions by sleuths?
Why?
An unstable model,
we call it coherence,
exists as an idol
to gain our adherence.
Why?
Fact supported by fact
and proved by each other-
baseless evidence backed
by death of the author.
Why?
As we throw out the man,
trying to even odds,
we believe that we can
think much like our own gods.
Why?
Because simple nature
appears to take control
of our every venture
to become in the know.
Why?
It's an infinite line
or perfect paradox
I believe could define
what lies inside the box.
Why?
The only thing I know
is that I know nothing.
PathosMaster manipulator,
your words are a sword-
not the olive branch you sought
The wiser alligator
wastes no time on tears-
cheap tactics won't beat forethought
You take your aim at the heart
but cut your own throat
You take a stand for true love
to be a scapegoat
Don't tell me how you feel-
emotions are traitors
These demons in a bottle
cannot be victors
Maybe I'm angry
and maybe I'm sad-
maybe this issue
drives me a bit mad!
Draining chemicals
inside of my head,
I calmly present
what has to be read.
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Overall Vision Originality Technique ImpactI'll start with saying that the use of rhyme is well used. It creates an easy to follow flow through the poem itself. I like some of the words you used like "Quoting statements undead". Something original.
I felt a little lost with this poem but did understand the use of argument. It seemed a little vague, and I wanted to know what could have sprouted such an argument. The impact is a little short coming for me personally.
Some improvements? Maybe capitalizing the second line, as it is a speech quote in the context you placed it in. "That's what you said!". Also for the 8th line "All is for naught." Other than possible additions of other punctuation to complete the kind of flow you want for your piece.