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This is the way I see

Is this a poem
or a song?

Is this a right
for a wrong?

Is this a fight
to prolong?

Is this the place
I belong?

Are these borders
shore to shore?

Is there an end
to this war?

What am I still
fighting for?

Does it matter
anymore?

Are there reasons
for these lines?

Is there purpose
in these rhymes?

Is there penance
for my crimes?

Is there still hope
for these times?

This is the way I breathe

I will let these
questions go

Forget what I
used to know

Set my sights on
a new goal

Exposition
of my soul

My own limits
create this quirk

I don't let them
define my work

I'm in control
of this meter

Of my own will
I'm the master

Everything is
breaking apart

A condition
of my heart

Broken rhythm
and failed rhyme;
punctuation
added this time...

It doesn't matter
anymore

It didn't matter
ever before

Because the planet
doesn't know my soul-
this is the way I
let the world go
A poem about escaping the inherent problems of reality... by writing poetry. ^_^

A fitting end to the conclusive, twelve-poem "Limitless" collection, I think.

Previous: Good Days and Vice VersaHello,
good morning,
how are you? 
What happened to
your glistening dew? 
Evaporated
and disenchanted,
I’m sick and tired
of being jaded;
bad days are to be
anticipated… 
But either way,
I’ll be okay- 
A bad day is
on the same coin
as a good one-
the two conjoin 
Good night,
sleep tight,
turn off the light 
For the moment
I give up the fight 
Over-exerted
and discontented,
I’m sick and tired
of feeling faded;
better days should be
anticipated… 
But either way,
I’ll be okay- 
A bad day is
the other side
of a good one-
the two collide 
I flip a coin
for it entails
duality
of heads and tails
Ultimately
both love and strife
are two faces
of minted life...


The First: Life AwaitsThis one is for the brokenhearted:
the failures,
fools,
sinners,
and misguided.
When the world is weary
of itself
it becomes difficult to
find yourself
and confidence is left on
the shelf
next to former symbols of
your health…
Hey, chin up-
your life awaits!
Idleness is death
and harsher fates.
Don’t succumb
to apathy-
try to accept that
we’re meant to be.
I’m writing this for the bleeding hearts:
the teachers,
nuns,
leaders,
and young upstarts.
When the world rejects your
charity
it becomes difficult to
give pity
to critics and cynics of
society
who measure your love as a
scarcity…
Hey, chin up-
your life awaits!
Resentment is death
and harsher fates.
Don’t let go
of empathy-
be the person
you want to be.
Oh, don’t let go!
Please don’t let go…
We both must know
this planet could
use another
enlivened soul.
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:icondragonkeeper92:
This is amazing, I love you how you stitched this together. This is hard, but I'm amazed by the way you made the rhymes make sense, instead of just throwing in random words to make it sound nice. You have a true talent for this. I felt the emotion in this, it pulled at my heart strings. My only critique would be that you would limit the amount of times you use a certain rhyme, but that's not even a major problem. You don't have to listen to me if you don't want to. This was extravagant, you have skills, amazing skills.
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I love the flow of the poem and how everything fit perfectly into place. I really enjoyed the way you questioned everything yet didn't make it a stereotypical question-type poem :) I can feel the message you are trying to convey, but I am not forcing myself to understand it. I feel like the originality is not all there but everything is inspired from something else, so it was rather original I have just seen other poems in a similar style. Keep up the good work and don't stop writing. This is great and don't let anyone tell so are just another writer trying to make it in the world. Thanks for reading.
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fivethousandtrees Featured By Owner May 17, 2013  Student Writer
These are my favorite lines: "Are there reasons/for these lines? [...] this is the way I/let the world go"
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TristanCody Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Student Writer
Nice use of rhyming here. The repetition adds a little something to it.

I think we all can relate to using poetry to escape reality. It is something I find myself wandering off to do one days where things just go sour.

Very easy to relate to and a pleasure to read aloud. Good job, my friend. :clap:
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goldshroom Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Student Writer
Oh yes. The first thing I want to do whenever I'm bored, distracted, or downright unhappy is to grab a pencil and notebook and write down the first thing that comes to mind.
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TristanCody Featured By Owner May 13, 2013  Student Writer
Good practice.
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WildWolf96 Featured By Owner May 10, 2013
hahaha hello again! It's not often I look at my deviantwatch, and know exactly who the author of a poem is by seeing the preview image. You have an amazing way with words, and I can always tell when a poem was written by you. I don't know how, I just... can xD You are an amazing person, and don't you dare stop writing poetry. Ever haha
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:icongoldshroom:
goldshroom Featured By Owner May 10, 2013  Student Writer
Well, I do try to stand out a bit. :D I've more or less spent the last two months trying to discover and perfect my own style, so your compliment is very much appreciated. :heart:
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WildWolf96 Featured By Owner May 11, 2013
You're an amazing poet, really you are. The two months you spent perfecting your unique style really show ^-^
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lightningshinobi Featured By Owner May 10, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
That was beautiful T^T
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goldshroom Featured By Owner May 10, 2013  Student Writer
Thanks. :thanks:
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lightningshinobi Featured By Owner May 10, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're welcome :(
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